Rulers of the world
The rulers of the world, human's,
We are all truly controlled by greed,
Nobody really thinks of others,
I wish for freedom from these chains I bear,
From which we are all held,
I wish for people to open their eyes,
This world is so amazingly beautiful
And yet amazingly nobody has noticed,
And we neglect it so badly,
Nobody is grateful for this place we call home,
We keep destroying its beauty each day,
But nobody will notice as we go about
Our busy lives, nobody will open their eyes,
Just take a second, to gaze at this wonderful world,
To truly see the freedom and beauty
That surrounds us, and how amazing this world,
Really is.
Last updated 269 days ago by Angharad
Thanks for the feedback and i will do my best to improve my poem :) What sort of examples did you have in mind?
Angharad 269 days ago
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I love tha passion behind this writing. It's bold and doesn't hold back. Still, I'd like to see more decoration around it -- not to hide that passion, but enhance it. It would be nice to have visual, colorful examples of this beauty and greed juxtaposed for your reader to bear witness.
Bryan Falla 269 days ago